Academic IELTS Writing Task 2 Topic ( In January, 2016) & Band 9.0 Model Essay

SAMPLE ESSAY
SAMPLE ESSAY

IELTS Writing Actual Test in January, 2015 & Band 9 Argumentative Essay – Topic: 

It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Band 9.0 sample

It is true that some commentators argue that it is more important for children to study the history of their own country or region, rather than the history of the world. I disagree with this view, because I believe that schools should teach local, national and world history.

On the one hand, it is significant that schoolchildren should learn about their local history. Firstly, knowing about the past of their region or country will foster a sense of belonging and pride in each child. For example, by studying how’ earlier generations fought and made sacrifices for the freedom of the country, Vietnamese youngsters will appreciate more the value of the way of life and liberty that they enjoy today. Secondly, young children also learn about the origins and core values of their motherland through history lessons. As a result, they will gain a deeper understanding of each traditional event, and be motivated to carry on the best customs for generations to come.

On the other hand, the value of studying world history must not be underestimated. The modem trend towards globalization makes it all the more necessary for schoolchildren to have some knowledge of people from other ethnic groups and different traditions. Armed with this broader perspective, it will be easier for them to form a mutual understanding if they know about the origins and past development of other people across the world. Another important factor is that a study of world history provides youngsters with an overview of the interrelationship of nations and how international historical events, such as the end of colonialism, have shaped contemporary society.

In conclusion, I would argue that it is equally important for schoolboys and schoolgirls to study local history as well as world history.

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Use words/phrases:

foster a sense of belonging: develop a feeling of being part of a community.

Example: Every morning, all the children sang the school song in the hall, and this fostered a sense of belonging to the school.

core values: the most important or central values of something.

Example: The core values of the French Revolution were Liberty, Equality and Property.

ethnic groups: people belonging to a nation that share a cultural tradition.

Example: In the United States, there are many ethnic groups who come from different countries and cultures.

Armed with: knowing something that you need in order to perform a certain task.

Example: Armed with all the facts, he was well-prepared for his interview

broader perspective: a wider and more complete understanding of something.

Example: To understand the conflicts in Asia, we have to see events from a broader perspective of international politics.

 

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