Academic IELTS Writing Task 2 – Cause and Solution

There is a general increase in anti-social behaviours and lack of respect for others
There is a general increase in anti-social behaviours and lack of respect for others

TOPIC: There is a general increase in anti-social behaviours and lack of respect for others. What are the causes and solutions? (IELTS Writing Test in Vietnam, 05/12/2015)

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The widespread problem of anti-social behaviours and disrespectful attitudes towards others has long been a major topic of concern in society. Some of the major culprits of this problem will be discussed before the most important solutions are drawn.

Reasons for this alarming situation vary. In some cases, people may hold an anti-social attitude or disrespect others because they live in an environment where violence and discrimination are the norms. For example, children of sexist parents in rural families in Vietnam, irrespective of their gender, show a worrying tendency of disrespecting women. In some other cases, it is the lack of parental guidance that is to blame. As modern parents are becoming increasingly busy with their jobs, they may have the proclivity to be indifferent to children education. When there is no one to help young children distinguish between the good and the bad, ill-mannered attitudes may emerge and develop among them without being controlled.

A number of definite actions could be taken to mitigate the problem. On the national level, the first obvious solution is to reduce violence and discrimination. As this would be a massive act, the all voters and legislators should be responsible. Together, they could call for stricter enforcement of the laws on violent and discriminatory acts to deter them from happening. In addition, on the nuclear-family level, parents must not underestimate the significance of their guidance for children. If they notice any signs of an anti-social or insolent manner in children, they must provide them with negative evaluations of these signs. At the same time, parents could also educate their children about social manners by instilling a pro-social sense in them. These actions, albeit small, could have a strong influence on children when they mature.

To conclude, it is clear that violence, discrimination and the indifference of parents to children education are the major catalysts for increase in anti-social behaviours and disrespect for others. Strong measures, such as stringent law enforcement on violent and discriminatory acts, must be taken to alleviate this distressing situation.

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  • The rise in poor moral behaviours among people has attracted lot of concern. This may be a result of several challenges faced by individuals. There are a number of solutions to these problems.

    Firstly, disrespectful attitude may be a result of poor or no moral tutolage at the development stage of children. Modern society has brought with it the struggle for survival which leave parents with little or no time to teach their wards the different between good and bad and correct them appropriately when they default. When schools are also too busy with their curriculum, the children are left at the mercy of society. This children may grow up not being able to demonstrate proper morals.

    Secondly, improper morals may be birthed from a society of hate and violence. When people breed hate for each other, there hearts will always devise strategise for war, and mutual respect will be totally absent. For instance, the violence in the southern part of Nigeria in 1999 led to many losing their lives until the intervention of the government.

    There are a good number of solutions to these challenges. Parents should consider their children as the future and always incorporate them into their daily schedule. In addition, moral teachings should be part of school’s curriculum at children developmental stages. Lastly, the issue of violence should be addressed by inacting and enforcing laws against violence and promoting mediums that will foster peace in our society.

    In conclusion, with the measures discussed, the issue of moral disfunctional behaviour can be addressed and reduced in the society.

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