Academic IELTS Writing Task 2 Topic 07

Model Essay 13:

Stepping in to the competitive world, women have set their foot in every walk of life. However, in much of the world some areas are still male-dominated. Are men impossibly holding their higher ascendancy above women? I believe that a great many people,especially men hold the answers that “ it is obviously true”. In my perceptions, success is in the hands of those who dare to walk on the path of fire and thorn to claim their talents. In other words, gender equality should be widely promoted in today’society, both males and females can assume their responsibility for any professions.
The first point to note is that society does not assign either males or females to do a certain kind of job and gender discrimination is no longer valuable, in comparison with the past. Modern community treats us the same social conditions and the same advanced education. That means we have more and full chances to develop ourselves in every area at highest level. Thus, the most skillful person will be appointed to an important post, no matter whether they are males or females. It is said that the 21st century marks an unmistakable progress in occupational segregation which has cracked many authorities’s brain. Emerging as a typical example of the success, Japanese government makes the best of reviving a crowded female workforce and promulgating the laws of openness in professions. History predicates that Japanese women, especially married have experienced a period of gender discrimination that they did not have any chances of promotion at work. It is extremely unfair and it is the root of commotions in Japanese community. Back up to the issue of occupational segregation, perhaps from now on, no politicians in any countries make the same mistake as Japanese ones in the past. It is crystal clear that politicians value peaceful labour above riots.
Secondly, no one has inborn merits that stand them in good stead. Professions in the fields of mathematics, computer science, the natural sciences and technology are for men and not for women. This attitude is far from being valid. According to a newest study, if a man finds himself working in a “female- oriented” job, he ends up earning 12.5 percent less than his male counterparts, whereas a woman who works in a “male-dominated” field earns 25.9 percent more than her female peers. So interestingly women in fact are earning more than men because of their less committing faults and their capacity of dealing with matters with accuracy and caution. Thus, what is the best solution for the thorny problem of making a more equal workforce? There is no way around but the labor pool must be balanced out by drawing from a supply of trained men or women to cover the skill gaps. But it is tough to achieve in reality if gender discrimination is alive. Therefore, it is time to exclude job stereotyping by gender from our community if we want to see men in the maternity ward and day care centers or women in trucking, construction and heavy machinery operations.
It would be great to achieve an ideal employment balance on a national scale and we believe in the right direction of our government for a workforce that never sleeps.

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    Woman and men are commonly seen as having different strength and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

    Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    Write at least 250 words.

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