Academic IELTS Writing Task 2 Topic (in May, 2015) & Band 9.0 Sample

All progress takes place outside the comfort zone
All progress takes place outside the comfort zone

IELTS Writing Actual Test & Band 9.0 Discursive Essay – Topic: Education

Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Others think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Band 9.0 Model Answer:

Finding ways to improve educational quality is often one of the top priorities in every education system. In some cultures, high school students are encouraged to give their opinions about teachers, but I believe that this can also give rise to lack of respect and discipline in the classroom.

On the one hand, it is true that feedback from learners may contribute to an improvement in educational quality. In many cases, the level of comprehension of students relies very much not on the content of the lesson but on the way teachers conduct it. If, for example, the class is slow, it will be ineffective for teachers to teach too fast so that most students fail to retain the information. Without the comments of students, it would be difficult to know whether the speed of the lesson is appropriate for the class, which may eventually impair the quality of the lesson.

However, there are several drawbacks of allowing students to make comments and criticism on their teachers. Firstly, teachers can be vulnerable to the negative words of students. Many will feel that their efforts in delivering the lesson deserve praise rather than criticism or any form of feedback. This idea is commonly shared by teachers in the education systems of many Asian countries. Secondly, the classroom may be in chaos due to massive numbers of comments. Opinions vary from students to students, and it would be impractical for teachers to work out a way of teaching that can satisfy all students.

In conclusion, it seems to me that encouraging high school students to comment about their teachers does not necessarily mean an improvement in education quality.

(277 words – written by ielts.vinh@gmail.com)  

Useful Expressions:

  • to retain smth: to keep something; to continue to have something
    ==>She has a good memory and finds it easy to retain facts.
  • To impair smth: to damage something or make something worse.
    ==>His age impaired his chances of finding a new job.
  • To be vulnerable to smth: weak and easily hurt physically or emotionally
    ==>Old people are particularly vulnerable to the flu.
  • chaos: a state of complete confusion and lack of order
    ==>The house was in chaos after the party. 

 

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1 Comment

  • Should students evaluate, question and assess the quality of lessons and teachers? Some believe the practice of questioning or criticizing the teachers’ work from students is improper and disrespect, whilst others argue that phrasing questions and assessment to the lessons are what students should implement. After weighting evidences, I find the latter viewpoint more convincing as evaluation after using service, education, is a common sense and as a tool for education improvement.
    Every products, services should being worth our money and time, regardless paid directly by users or third party, through our assessment on services’ performances. It is also true to apply this philosophy into a service of spending money in form of tuition to exchange for information, knowledge and mind-set, which frankly so-called education in schools by teachers. Regarding the true nature of functionality, teachers, tour guides or waiters all play the same function in their workplaces, which is supplying the service. They might supply their service in different forms as giving knowledge, guiding tourists, or serving the food, respectively. We always say this is the era of equality, while there has never been a backlash around should we have the assessment the serving of a waiter or not but some of us stop children from evaluating or questioning their teachers. The fact seems goes against our belief in equality and how economic rule works. For examples, developed countries as USA, England or Germany, they welcome the fair and proper assessment from students because that is the privilege of students.
    Bettering off education is one of the benefits from students’ evaluation to teachers’ performance. First, evaluating teachers’ quality helps students to gain a critical thinking, debating, fact checking abilities, and better their learning to the subjects and life skills because once we let students practice the right to evaluate teachers, students need to research more papers to double check with what they learnt, to use fact, examples, proofs to compare, to criticize teachers. Secondly, the quality of teachers in some countries in fact is not qualified enough to teach, which might results in the ruin of whole student generation without any timely intervention from schools authorities or governments. For examples, in 2010, the loose admission in pedagogic major in Viet Nam unintentionally gave the green light for those who fail other university entrances with no interest of teaching to become teachers in the future. Combining with that, bribe to have a well-paid job as teachers also place students in the situation of learning with less customized, experienced teachers. Consequently, students have their voice out freely for help from schools, or they stuck in a bad environment for years.
    conclusion, students should evaluate teachers in the right manner and procedure because it helps students better in self-studying, teacher teach more interestingly and properly.

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